Island In The Sand, Part XII

ISLAND IN THE SAND

Part XII

The draw of the storage room was so magnetic and great that Star could not stop herself from surging forward, down the extended steps and into the near end of the giant cavern.

16 Comments

Hampton on April 17, 2018 at 7:53 pm

This is 1st time they been in an operation elevator??? Outside personal elevator didn’t work…but few places it sounds like they been in an elevator before”bracing themselfs an manual override” not nitpicking…lol..luv the story
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- James Strauss on April 17, 2018 at 10:53 pm
  
  Thanks Hampton. Yes, I like that edit and need that kind of help now and then.
  Really nice of you to take the time to tell me…
  Semper fi,
  Jim
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billy b. on April 17, 2018 at 3:11 pm

dam Jim the cliff hangers are so intense. started reading 30 days then found this gem of a story you are a artist with words. keep them coming thanks Billy
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- James Strauss on April 17, 2018 at 10:48 pm
  
  Thanks Billy B. Much appreciate the compliment and I will keep them coming as best I can.
  Semper fi,
  Jim
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Steve Werfel on April 13, 2018 at 11:53 am

It’s great to see your Island novel being written in real time. Thanks again for involving us.
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- James Strauss on April 13, 2018 at 1:10 pm
  
  Real time. I like that. I am, indeed, writing the book in real time. I just hadn’t thought of it in that way.
  I am glad you like being along for the ride, or read, or whatever!
  
  Semper fi,
  Jim
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Jim on April 13, 2018 at 5:55 am

👍
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- James Strauss on April 13, 2018 at 10:26 am
  
  Not even one word, but a nice compliment Jim!
  Semper fi,
  Jim
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Monty Ellis on April 11, 2018 at 8:52 am

I can’t help but to smile. Just about the time I was thinking that all of the elements for a perfect survival scenario were in place you dropped a cliff hanger. Nicely done! Still loving this tale.
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- James Strauss on April 11, 2018 at 11:15 am
  
  The perfect survival scenario. I like that phrase. I can’t imagine having thought it back deep in the bowels of the A Shau, but I like it here and now.
  The cliff hanger analogy is perfect, of course. I don’t think about it when I am writing but when I edit and reread I smile sometimes.
  Why did I stop where I stopped and wait to write the next segment. I don’t know, but thanks for pointing it out.
  Semper fi,
  Jim
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Me on April 10, 2018 at 8:58 pm

Awesome job. Thank you for sharing. God bless you.
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- James Strauss on April 11, 2018 at 11:57 am
  
  Thanks for the blessing and the compliment…
  Semper fi,
  Jim
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Walt McKinley on April 10, 2018 at 8:21 pm

Oh! You are so good! Just like in Thirty Days, I got sucker punched at the end of this segment. To read your work is wonderful, to know something of the man that created it is better. Thank you, rest up and listen to the BOSS.
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- James Strauss on April 11, 2018 at 11:58 am
  
  Thanks for another of your terrific compliments Walt. A better guy has never walked the planet…
  Semper fi,
  Jim
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Pete Billings on April 10, 2018 at 7:34 pm

Wow quite the twist at the end. Kind of confused on the Pick answered. Is that another name for Jordan or have I missed something? Star needs to think more how she can use Jordan to their advantage.
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- James Strauss on April 11, 2018 at 11:58 am
  
  No, Pete. That was an editing error, the Pick Jordon thing. Thanks for your guidance and help here, as usual…
  Semper fi,
  Jim
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