Arch Patton, Down in the Valley, Chapter 10 by James Strauss | 3 comments Arch Patton DOWN IN THE VALLEY Chapter 10 By James Strauss “Stairway to Heaven?” Arch said, looking intently into Matisse’s eyes. 3 Comments Dan Cotts on September 21, 2021 at 1:41 am Some minor editing suggestions follow: There’s a graveyard there that leads to path under Add “a” before “path” There’s a graveyard there that leads to a path under Arch didn’t even what kind of Add “know” after “even” Arch didn’t even know what kind of offer the Agency Add comma after “offer” / needs a break before “the Agency” offer, the Agency Like Kim chi disease Drop space between “Kim” and “chi” Like Kimchi disease I wish we had the Lincoln / Arch rented a Cadillac I wish we had the Cadillac OR I wish we had the Caddy Arch stared whit his upturned at the imposing very high point of the peak Change “whit” to “with” Maybe add “face” after “his” Arch stared with his face upturned at the imposing very high point of the peak he liked the big man lot for no reason Add “a” before “lot” he liked the big man a lot for no reason homologated / Homologate definition is – sanction, allow; especially : to approve or confirm officially / even the strange homologated form of the mix of native and Catholic beliefs melded together Maybe “homogeneous” instead of “homologated” even the strange homogeneous form of the mix of native and Catholic beliefs melded together We met a man named Ahi in Chapter 1. Is this the same Ahi or another person with the same name? Blessings & Be Well DanC Reply Joshua eck on August 2, 2019 at 9:37 pm Is this the end of the story?? Reply James Strauss on August 2, 2019 at 10:22 pm No, there should be a link on the bottom of Chapter 10 taking you to Chapter Eleven Reply Submit a Comment Cancel replyYour email address will not be published. Required fields are marked *Comment * Name * Email * Website Save my name, email, and website in this browser for the next time I comment. Notify me of followup comments via e-mail. You can also subscribe without commenting. Δ This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.