Arch Patton
DOWN IN THE VALLEY
Chapter 10
By James Strauss
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Arch Patton, Down in the Valley, Chapter 10
Some minor editing suggestions follow:
There’s a graveyard there that leads to path under
Add “a” before “path”
There’s a graveyard there that leads to a path under
Arch didn’t even what kind of
Add “know” after “even”
Arch didn’t even know what kind of
offer the Agency
Add comma after “offer” / needs a break before “the Agency”
offer, the Agency
Like Kim chi disease
Drop space between “Kim” and “chi”
Like Kimchi disease
I wish we had the Lincoln
/ Arch rented a Cadillac
I wish we had the Cadillac
OR I wish we had the Caddy
Arch stared whit his upturned at the imposing very high point of the peak
Change “whit” to “with” Maybe add “face” after “his”
Arch stared with his face upturned at the imposing very high point of the peak
he liked the big man lot for no reason
Add “a” before “lot”
he liked the big man a lot for no reason
homologated
/ Homologate definition is – sanction, allow; especially : to approve or confirm officially /
even the strange homologated form of the mix of native and Catholic beliefs melded together
Maybe “homogeneous” instead of “homologated”
even the strange homogeneous form of the mix of native and Catholic beliefs melded together
We met a man named Ahi in Chapter 1. Is this the same Ahi or another person with the same name?
Blessings & Be Well DanC
Is this the end of the story??
No, there should be a link on the bottom of Chapter 10 taking you to Chapter Eleven